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Question: Describe at least one character or individual in the text. Explain how the character/individual helped you understand an important message.

An important message that the audience understood through Frank was that everyone is driven by the desire to be loved.
Near the beginning of the film, Frank’s parents divorce and we see him propel himself into a life of crime in order to regain he received in his parent’s marriage. From there, through the use of mise-en-scene which shows him surrounded by others and upbeat soundtracks selected by Spielberg, the audience is led to believe that Frank’s wealth and associated community has satisfied his desire to be loved, but the audience soon realises that this is untrue.
After escaping the airplane that brought him to America from France, the audience sees Frank running towards his mother’s home - in tattered clothes and with dishevelled hair; this costume communicating the idea that he is desperate. The mise-en-scene of green and red conveys Christmas-time - a time where people are loved - which is a strong juxtaposition with the lonely and unloved Frank. Here, the important message that everyone is driven by the desire to be loved is understood by the audience because we see that all Frank wanted was to be loved by his others. As he approaches his mother’s home, he is on the outside while she, her new husband and child are on the inside. We are given a close-up of Frank’s face - which is visibly heartbroken to find that the love he pursued had been given to others. The ‘barrier’ of the house’s exterior blocking him from his mother symbolises that his route towards satisfying his desire to be loved has been blocked. In this moment, through Spielberg’s excellent use of symbolism and the close-up shot, we see that Frank simply wanted to be loved. This important message, everyone is driven by the desire to be loved, is understood by the audience through Frank’s heartbroken reaction, accentuated by symbolism and juxtaposition, to his mother moving on.
Spielberg wanted to communicate this important message as, since he was a child whose parents also divorced, he also pursued this desire to be loved as Frank did. Spielberg was able to relate to the insatiable desire to belong brought about by his parent’s divorce and wanted to allow his audience to understand this also to evoke sympathy, and perhaps a tenderness towards those in similar conditions. By using Frank to communicate this important message, the audience can easily understand that everyone is driven by the desire to belong - that was all Frank wanted in the end.

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In the intro you need to do several things; set up both sides of the question and the text etc you are talking about. Your start here is rather chaotic. Have another go at including all you need to…
You have all of the information you need here, techniques, ideas and importance. You just need to structure it for the question. Have a go at the intro for a couple of questions to set them up for a start.
With this one we have no idea of the film, the director, what is going on.
You need to think about the question.
Hope that helps.

Sorry about that, I forgot to add the context.
That was just a paragraph of it
Here’s just an introduction and a body paragraph

Question: Describe at least one character or individual in the text. Explain how the character/individual helped you understand an important message.

Intro: Steven Spielberg’s film “Catch Me If You Can” follows the escapades of Frank Abagnale Jnr (Frank) as he impersonates high-ranking occupations (pilot, doctor and lawyer) while evading the FBI. Spielberg uses Frank as a character to help his audience understand the important message that everyone is driven by the desire to be loved, and the character of Frank Snr to help his audience understand that displays of opulence cannot purchase relationships. After watching his film, Spielberg hopes that his audience will gain a better appreciation of the difficulty of being a child whose parents have divorced.

An important message that the audience understood through Frank was that everyone is driven by the desire to be loved.
Near the beginning of the film, Frank’s parents divorce and we see him propel himself into a life of crime in order to regain he received in his parent’s marriage. From there, through the use of mise-en-scene which shows him surrounded by others and upbeat soundtracks selected by Spielberg, the audience is led to believe that Frank’s wealth and associated community has satisfied his desire to be loved, but the audience soon realises that this is untrue.
After escaping the airplane that brought him to America from France, the audience sees Frank running towards his mother’s home - in tattered clothes and with dishevelled hair; this costume communicating the idea that he is desperate. The mise-en-scene of green and red conveys Christmas-time - a time where people are loved - which is a strong juxtaposition with the lonely and unloved Frank. Here, the important message that everyone is driven by the desire to be loved is understood by the audience because we see that all Frank wanted was to be loved by his others. As he approaches his mother’s home, he is on the outside while she, her new husband and child are on the inside. We are given a close-up of Frank’s face - which is visibly heartbroken to find that the love he pursued had been given to others. The ‘barrier’ of the house’s exterior blocking him from his mother symbolises that his route towards satisfying his desire to be loved has been blocked. In this moment, through Spielberg’s excellent use of symbolism and the close-up shot, we see that Frank simply wanted to be loved. This important message, everyone is driven by the desire to be loved, is understood by the audience through Frank’s heartbroken reaction, accentuated by symbolism and juxtaposition, to his mother moving on.
Spielberg wanted to communicate this important message as, since he was a child whose parents also divorced, he also pursued this desire to be loved as Frank did. Spielberg was able to relate to the insatiable desire to belong brought about by his parent’s divorce and wanted to allow his audience to understand this also to evoke sympathy, and perhaps a tenderness towards those in similar conditions. By using Frank to communicate this important message, the audience can easily understand that everyone is driven by the desire to belong - that was all Frank wanted in the end.