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I will try to make comment in order of your writing - but it is a little tricky when I cannot comment directly on thw piece of writing.
Your intro is clear and to the point. Structure questions are sometimes hard to answer.
Your first point about the opening of the story focussing on setting is a good one and you back that up with relevant evidence from the text.
In the middle section you get confusing by talking about the ‘structure of the setting’ not the ‘structure of the story’ - watch this!
The end part gets back on track and to the point.
You know the story well and have used relevant supporting evidence.