Studyit

Could i have feedback on my Animal Farm essay

Animal farm

George Orwell’s animal farm has a few important characters, one being Napoleon and how he changes throughout the text. (Napoleon is a wild boar based on Joseph Stalin) who takes over the farm one old major dies. He gets a taste of what it’s like to have power and gets hungry for more.

Animal Farm is based on a farm that had farmers who the animals were slaving for, the animals protested and chased the farmers off the farm. The animals leader old major dies and Napoleon takes over the farm and manipulates the other animals to thinking he is always right and uses their lack of knowledge against them. George Orwell wants us to be aware of what can happen when their leader lies and how power can corrupt people.

The importance of Napoleon was shown in ‘’Animal Farm’’ when he used the 9 attack dogs to scare the other animals and consolidate his power, for example when the windmill fell down Napoleon blamed it on snowball ‘’ he has betrayed us’’ said Napoleon, and because of the other animals lack of knowledge they believed him. This resulted in Napoleon and Snowball fighting and Napoleons 9 attack dogs (military forces) chased Snowball away and off the farm. This shows that his power is making him manipulative and he makes people think that he is right.

Napoleon’s importance was also shown in ‘’Animal Farm’’ when he sold Boxer to a horse slaughtering company after Boxer injured himself working in the quarry. Boxer worked too hard and collapsed. Napoleon told the other animals that he is going to the hospital but was really going away to get slaughtered, in exchange for Boxer, Napoleon got a box of whisky and eventually broke the commandment ‘’no animal shall drink alcohol’’ and changed it to ‘’no animal shall drink alcohol, to excess’’. Napoleon told the other animals that Boxers last words were ‘’Napoleon is always right’’. This shows the importance of Napoleon and how he is manipulative and how he does things for self benefit.

Lastly Napoleon’s importance in ‘’Animal Farm’’ was shown when Napoleon was hungry for more selfish needs and canceled all meetings around the farm, ‘’they were a waste of time’’, Napoleon said. After Napoleon chased Snowball off the farm he took the opportunity to end all meetings. This shows Napoleon’s manipulative, he is selfish and he is transforming from a leader to a dictator.

So to summarise in ‘’Animal Farm’’, the importance of Napoleon and how he changed throughout the text is a key theme in this novel, the way that Napoleon took over from Old Major and wanted power and control over the farm, it made him selfish and he prioritizes himself over the farm. He uses his power in the struggle of his citizens (like Stalin). He transforms from a leader to a dictator and shows conflict and how the abuse of power can lead to corruption.

Kiā ora kaimoana69.
Welcome to Studyit.
Not sure what the question is you are answering but think it may be : Describe an important character. Explain how they change through the text???
With the next essay you could put the question in to give me a better clue :wink:
With this novel you could set up in the opening how it was written as a comment on the corruption with the Communist system in Russia and shows how when power is given to people they tend to corrupt it. Then bring in Napoleon as you have, explain who he is and what he does. Describe why he is important - because he is in charge, he treats the others badly, he wants power, he is prepared to do anything to get it…and then mention the second half of the question which is related to how the character changes. He changes from being in favour of all working together to wanting the power for himself. This is what the purpose of the author - to show how a lust for power drives people to do awful things and manipulate the rules so they always win - is. It is always good to have the idea of what the author meant when they wrote the text behind you in any question.
You use some really good examples to give as evidence and clearly know what happens in the book. Your conclusion gets to the point and brings things together. here is a good place to go back to the purpose - The character changes from this to this and this makes them an important character because it shows us …( here the theme and purpose).
A good effort, you clearly know the text, it is just figuring out exactly what the question is asking that could be worked on a bit more. :+1: