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Describe a key relationship between two or more characters or individuals in the text. Explain how this relationship helped you to understand at least one of these characters or individuals?

Dystopian text shows a cruel reality of when human nature can get a taste of power. Orwells ‘Animal farm’ highlights how far people will go to take power, and how they get rid of people that want power as well. The relationship between Napoleon and Snowball shows how far Napoleon will go to have power and what he does for it.

Orwell, wrote animal farm as an allegory to make people aware of the truth about communism and totalitarianism, and how Joseph Stalin drifts away from socialist ideals soviet union during the russian revolution and show the abuse of power through pigs and what each one does to try gain power over another.

Napoleon and Snowball have a key relationship throughout the text. When Napoleon expels Snowball with 9 enormous 'dogs that came bounding back’. The use of the verb “bounding” highlights the use of them knowing who their owner is and where they need to go. The use of this technique shows that the dogs were used for a different purpose then what they were born for, this shows that Orwell explains what Stalin did with The NKDV and used them as secret police and that is what Napoleon is doing with the dogs. Orwell is explaining that people won’t fight against the NKDV as they knew as soon as they tried going against the police they were in trouble. This links back to Orwell’s purpose of writing this story because that the person in power will always use something to get away with what they have done.

Napoleon used Snowball as a scapegoat in the text. Napoleon used Snowball to blame for everything that went wrong on the farm. When the windmill was destroyed, Napoleon tells the animals. “Comrades, do you know who is responsible for destroying our windmill, SNOWBALL, Snowball has done this”. The emphasis on the Noun ‘Snowball’ shows the technique to show why Napoleon and the other pigs got rid of Snowball to have power for themselves. Orwell used this technique to show the reader how Stalin/ Napoleon manipulates the animals into believing that someone is wrong for whatever they do throughout the text. Orwell did this to show what people can do with people by their side and make use of the person the previous got rid of and make them sound like they did everything wrong when they were in position of power.

Napoleon used Snowball to instill fear into the animals, the animals now knew Snowball as someone that did something wrong on the farm “Suppose you had decided to follow Snowball, with his moonshine of windmills- Snowball, who, as we now know, is no better than a criminal” The use of the verb ‘Suppose’ shows that the pigs believed that many of the animals followed Snowball. The use of the verb shows how the pigs manipulate the animals into believing that Snowball was wrong and the pigs were using him as an installation of fear into the animals eyes. Orwell wrote this as a sign that no matter the person they will always say the leader before them did everything wrong. As it instills fear in the people’s eyes for not wanting the previous leader to fight back for his spot. This makes me understand the character of Napoleon as being one for wanting power over the other Animals on the farm, and really wanting power.

In conclusion, the relationship between Napoleon and Snowball helped me understand Napoleon’s character and what he will do on Animal farm to attain power in this text. Orwell’s Animal farm really highlights what the Character Napoleon does to gain power on the farm, and how people will get rid of other people to gain power as well. Dystopian text shows the cruel reality of when people get a taste of power.

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The introduction leaps right into the question which is great. You address both parts of the question. It might be a good idea to think about how to set up in the intro where you are going to go with the response. Eg " I will look at three key aspects of the relationships which illuminate, not only the other characters but also the underlying ideas, which is where the Merit and Excellence grades lie.
You get a little stymied by the techniques. In the written standard you can give examples of what happens rather than concentrating on spcific techniques( unless you are looking at a poem)
Try and develop the comments about the underlying idea.