Animal farm essay, any feedback would be great

Question:3 Describe at least one way that a character or individual changed in the text.
Explain how this change was important to the text as a whole.
Thesis statement

You can not trust anyone no matter how honest or believable they seem, as we can all lie. George Orwell’s animal farm shows this through the character Napoleon as he develops throughout the novel, and this has really changed my perspective on how you can trust people as a whole.


At the Start of the Novel, Animal Farm, Napoleon is one of the young boars who Mr Jones, the original farmer, had bred up to sell. Along with all of the other animals, Napoleon was heavily involved with all the secret meetings as they hoped to overthrow Mr Jones, so they could run the farm themselves as Mr Jones underfed and overworked them. However Napoleon evolved throughout this novel, and ended up becoming the dictator over the animal farm as Mr Jones once was. But on top of this, Napoleon let the pigs eat more food, live in the big farmhouse and even allowed them to drink alcohol. And when Napoleon made the other animals work, he was cruel and would half their rations if they didnt do the work they were supposed to do.

An example of this would be when all the animals returned from work one night towards the end of the novel, and Napoleon was walking around with all the other pigs, the only exception was that he had a whip in his trotter. The quote “he carried a whip in his trotter” that George Orwell used in the novel was intended to make the readers think that Napoleon had turned from being a comrade in part of the rebellion to being a harsh dictator, who wanted everything his way.

Orwell uses many techniques throughout his novel, and a lot of these techniques are used to make Napoleon look deceitful and repulsive. One of these techniques is persuading questions. Napoleon at first could not get the animals to believe him as he was not the smartest animal on the farm, but after exiling Snowball, he used Squealer to get his point across. And when the animals were in doubt Squealer was specifically good at getting them to change their minds and listen to everything Napoleon had to say.

One of these persuading and rhetorical questions that Squealer used was “You surely don’t want mr Jones back do you” which implies that he is trying to get them to think about how bad it was with mr Jones and how good it is with Napoleon when really Napoleon was just as bad as mr Jones at this point in the novel. The effect this had on the other animals was massive as they remembered the time before the rebellion as always being hungry and miserable but after Napoleon came to power, everything returned to how it was with Jones running the place. With Squealer implying that everything that Napoleon said was right, This made the animals think that with Napoleon leading the farm, everything was better than what it was like years earlier while Napoleon had just brainwashed them into thinking that.

Another technique used in animal farm is flashbacks. This technique corresponds to persuading questions because when Napoleon got squealer to convince the animals that what he was doing was right it gave them flashbacks of what the old days were like. Such as when Squealer taught the sheep to chant “four legs good, two legs better”. This gave the animals flashbacks to the old chant they used to sing which was “four legs good,two legs bad”. The chant that squealer taught the sheep also gave many members of the animal farm flashbacks of when they defeated mr jones in the battle of the cowshed, where they chanted “four legs good, two legs bad” after they forced mr Jones to flee from the farm once again.

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Nice opening statement with a good overview of who is changing - I would suggest adding a statement here that more explicitly addresses the explain part of the question EG “The development of Napolean was important to the text as a whole because…”

Have a look at structure - eg the two three paragraphs after “napolean” should be together and you need to have a conclusion at the end that sums up all the points.

You also start to veer away from the question when you start talking about techniques - One thing that might help with your paragraphs is a clear topic sentence (first sentence) for each that keeps you focused on the question.

EG see some starters below

  1. Firstly, Orwell presents Napolean as… through the way that…"

  2. As the text develops we see him start to change into… which is important to the text as a whole because it reflects the idea that…"

  3. By the end, we can see that Napolean has changed into …xyz, which is crucial because…

Then within each paragraph you can do your discussion of how the techniques were used to achieve this.

Hope this helps - working on structure will lift this heaps as you clearly understand the text :slight_smile: